tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post3240211234236789525..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: Rhetoric, Part Three: Polysyndeton & SimileStephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-9899218940198644722012-10-02T20:38:08.153-05:002012-10-02T20:38:08.153-05:00Oooh! I like, Allison. Well done!Oooh! I like, Allison. Well done!Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-1125784543933281612012-10-02T20:37:02.330-05:002012-10-02T20:37:02.330-05:00Great job, Allison! I like it.Great job, Allison! I like it.Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-78960872802348435612012-10-02T20:36:30.883-05:002012-10-02T20:36:30.883-05:00Sweet! Glad to help. :-)Sweet! Glad to help. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-50947404360699768042012-10-02T20:36:01.911-05:002012-10-02T20:36:01.911-05:00Me too! Good job. :-)Me too! Good job. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-34628702991784000022012-09-30T20:51:17.807-05:002012-09-30T20:51:17.807-05:00I think it sounds great!I think it sounds great!L.D.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47806472364693174892012-09-30T20:50:12.153-05:002012-09-30T20:50:12.153-05:00Hey, I really like the rhythm of that!Hey, I really like the rhythm of that!L.D.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-17741087783220963832012-09-29T08:26:08.756-05:002012-09-29T08:26:08.756-05:00LOLOLOL Soooo funny! I love that! I can just pictu...LOLOLOL Soooo funny! I love that! I can just picture that little kid gasping for breath after running his mouth 20 million miles per hour... :DAmanda Fischernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-65634408114052924702012-09-29T08:24:06.030-05:002012-09-29T08:24:06.030-05:00I love that one, Allison! Nice!I love that one, Allison! Nice!Amanda Fischernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-68019323802237220652012-09-28T23:18:48.508-05:002012-09-28T23:18:48.508-05:00I just thought of a simile also: "Suddenly, e...I just thought of a simile also: "Suddenly, everything fell into place. It was as if a giant torch burned in the middle of the room, welding together every person's past to create one clear picture."Allisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16812628829954571718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-814825032436954932012-09-28T23:05:50.324-05:002012-09-28T23:05:50.324-05:00I like the polysyndeton! How does this sound? &quo...I like the polysyndeton! How does this sound? "Why should I forgive you? You lied about who you were and you lied about why you were running away and you lied about being poor and you lied about me being in danger!"Allisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16812628829954571718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-29660047498100259402012-09-28T22:22:25.283-05:002012-09-28T22:22:25.283-05:00Hey this could so help me in my analyzation of JFK...Hey this could so help me in my analyzation of JFK inaugural speech! When he says "the strong are just and the weak secure and the peace preserved." That rhetoric essay has been killing me, but these little rhetoric lessons are helping!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17966569046671791211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-3496624161171972082012-09-28T18:28:17.335-05:002012-09-28T18:28:17.335-05:00here's a sort of polysyndeton:
My eyes narro...here's a sort of polysyndeton: <br /><br />My eyes narrowed suspiciously as I followed the feet to the ankles to the shins to the knees to the stomach to the chest to the chin to the face. <br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-71235404643931433702012-09-28T17:54:38.787-05:002012-09-28T17:54:38.787-05:00Well... Elena is 14 and she is living with her aun...Well... Elena is 14 and she is living with her aunt and uncle and is wearing a immodest skirt. The POV is from the daughter still sitting in the car, watching the whole thing. Alyson Schrollhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10985230257033740736noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-16758541365419884722012-09-28T17:33:02.232-05:002012-09-28T17:33:02.232-05:00LOL. That's fun, L.D. :-)LOL. That's fun, L.D. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-12565136919298943422012-09-28T17:32:06.116-05:002012-09-28T17:32:06.116-05:00Ahh, toddlers. I remember my child doing that. Sad...Ahh, toddlers. I remember my child doing that. Sadly, she still does, and she's 8!Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-80387057446419341552012-09-28T17:31:03.032-05:002012-09-28T17:31:03.032-05:00I really like that second one, Dakota. Makes me wa...I really like that second one, Dakota. Makes me want to look up and see what it is!Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-17074744279108210312012-09-28T16:53:01.016-05:002012-09-28T16:53:01.016-05:00:-) Puppies are cute, as is your simile. :-) Puppies are cute, as is your simile. Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-72300002462233751332012-09-28T16:52:17.998-05:002012-09-28T16:52:17.998-05:00Nice one, Arlette! :-)Nice one, Arlette! :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-71900233365735312632012-09-28T16:51:35.757-05:002012-09-28T16:51:35.757-05:00I like it, Amanda! :-)I like it, Amanda! :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-2095089628064751372012-09-28T16:13:24.334-05:002012-09-28T16:13:24.334-05:00Hm... When I wanted to have a little kid make a hu...Hm... When I wanted to have a little kid make a huge run-on sentence, I did something that was *like* a polysyndeton, but I didn't just use one conjunction. <br /><br />"Dad! Joel fell in the creek, and now he’s all wet and he wants me to get his towel but I dropped that in the creek and now he says he’ll break my bat and I need that bat because I’m having a baseball game and Flannery won’t let me borrow his because the last time I borrowed his bat I broke it, and I told him that that was when I was six but he doesn’t care because he says that I didn’t forgive him for stealing my honey bread and that was years ago too, but he stole my honey bread on purpose and I broke his bat accidently and so I said I’d forgive him but he doesn’t believe me because he thinks I’m just forgiving him so he’ll give me his bat!"L.D.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-57139503447166913562012-09-28T11:30:22.444-05:002012-09-28T11:30:22.444-05:00Here is a simile from my WIP:
Mom pointed to the ...Here is a simile from my WIP:<br /><br />Mom pointed to the skirt, Dad pointed inside, and Elena stomped her foot like a three year old not getting their wayAlyson Schrollhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10985230257033740736noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-9801396306591017242012-09-28T10:25:58.274-05:002012-09-28T10:25:58.274-05:00-Orrin smoothed down his wizard-like robe and comp...-Orrin smoothed down his wizard-like robe and composed himself. <br /><br />-The wind rushed over her ears, sounding like beating wings—wait, that wasn't the wind. <br /><br />hehe, a couple of similes from my own work-in-progress. ;)Dakota Densmorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00587804844274127979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-91326133718725733022012-09-28T09:48:15.723-05:002012-09-28T09:48:15.723-05:00Oh I love similes. Put them in my writing all the ...Oh I love similes. Put them in my writing all the time... Hmmm. <br /><br />The puppy scampered along the floor, rolling like a ball. <br /><br /> What? I love puppies. :DBethany Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160544671105522363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-56365930963597305222012-09-28T09:20:58.738-05:002012-09-28T09:20:58.738-05:00A Polysyndeton I recently used (without knowing it...A Polysyndeton I recently used (without knowing it was called like that ;))<br />'I already told you.' He said, heavily sighing. 'Lea wasn't at the boat house, nor Nadia, nor Avelyn, nor Ina. It was just Luke and me. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15317792300616098592noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47979593987660604252012-09-28T09:08:27.908-05:002012-09-28T09:08:27.908-05:00Here's a simile: She tapped the pencil on the ...Here's a simile: She tapped the pencil on the table like an extremely nervous drummer. <br /><br />Not the best one I could come up with, I'm sure, but I don't have time :( I have tons of school today :PAmanda Fischernoreply@blogger.com