tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post4863193034432547802..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: Intriguing Story OpeningsStephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger158125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-59625007881698840792016-01-22T15:12:35.825-06:002016-01-22T15:12:35.825-06:00I've just discovered this blog and so, natural...I've just discovered this blog and so, naturally, being the voracious reader and wannabe-writer that I am, I've been reading all of the archives. Which is a lot of fun! But I have a question. You wrote in this post that writers should try not to "show the character going about his regular day." This is precisely what I have done in my current WIP, because my story is about a girl who is thrown into another world, and I wanted to show what her life was like before this happens, to show why, throughout the story, she is fighting to get back home. Her new life in the other world is not one that you'd expect her to want to leave, and so I don't want people to be confused. Does that make sense? Do you think that I should change my opening scene? I definitely would appreciate your advice! :)Rosie McCannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10756806467175885197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-53579390803815391952014-10-28T07:40:06.980-05:002014-10-28T07:40:06.980-05:00I like this one:) I like this one:) Jesus Girl (aka Hannah)https://www.blogger.com/profile/15188623825301576640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-24071769915865953982014-10-28T01:35:42.986-05:002014-10-28T01:35:42.986-05:00A few more of my lines:
Every world has its evils ...A few more of my lines:<br />Every world has its evils – The Bane of the Dragons (something I never wrote past the first nine chapters).<br />The fire shone in his eyes. It made the flames flicker and jump and the shadows play a game of dance across the room. – Something I’m working on, I only have two pages so far, and no title.<br />And a few more without a story-<br />“It’s funny, isn’t it? The skulls. They grin like a half-wit sprite with a bottle for a brain, almost as if it’s the gods’ way of saying, ‘Hey, being dead isn’t that bad! At least you get to smile a lot!’”<br />“Do you have it?” He shuddered. His breath was coming fast and scared, and he couldn’t help it. He glanced anxiously around the street.<br />Being dead is a bore.<br />They say Aurelian executions are supposed to be nerve-racking. An embodiment of death and horror in all its gory spectacle. Curses to the man who came up with them, and cheers to the man who came up with knives.<br />Jonathannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-27615099012557984572014-10-28T01:14:59.766-05:002014-10-28T01:14:59.766-05:00Wow! I'd definitely read this! I'm hooked....Wow! I'd definitely read this! I'm hooked.Jonathannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-49826504983381552792014-10-27T20:09:19.493-05:002014-10-27T20:09:19.493-05:00Oooh. That sounds kinda scary. I'd read on!
...Oooh. That sounds kinda scary. I'd read on!<br /><br /><br />Alexa S. Winters<br />thessalexa.blogspot.comAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-23462483726929351662014-10-27T20:08:51.067-05:002014-10-27T20:08:51.067-05:00Sounds interesting! That "shadows of his futu...Sounds interesting! That "shadows of his future" part especially.<br /><br /><br />Alexa S. Winters<br />thessalexa.blogspot.comAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-53419151664017047872014-10-27T20:07:15.632-05:002014-10-27T20:07:15.632-05:00Thank you so much! :DThank you so much! :DAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-26616994832598469672014-10-27T10:44:16.883-05:002014-10-27T10:44:16.883-05:00I think I rewrote my opening line some 20 times, m...I think I rewrote my opening line some 20 times, my first 200 words some 15 times and the first page 10 times. I used to hate all of them, but after multiple rewriting, beta reading, submitting to lots of different people, I'm beginning to be happy with it. <br /><br />It's an endless work and sometimes people get the weirdest impresison from things you'd never imagine. Last year on the forum of NaNoWriMo, for example, you could post the first 100 words. A person asked me whether one of my MC was a dog O_O<br />I'm very happy I posted those 100 words... even if I was shocked by the responce.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-28256542860275394242014-10-27T08:15:21.290-05:002014-10-27T08:15:21.290-05:00That's awesome, Alexa! You've pulled me in...That's awesome, Alexa! You've pulled me in. I'm already feeling sorry for the MC and her loss. I'd read this book!Jonathannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-64102893690976484992014-10-26T13:36:08.862-05:002014-10-26T13:36:08.862-05:00...Bekah here.
"Even the wind seemed hushed ......Bekah here.<br /><br />"Even the wind seemed hushed on a night like tonight."<br /><br />What do you think?<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-23891084469725003002014-10-25T16:43:47.552-05:002014-10-25T16:43:47.552-05:00Here is the first few words of Shadows of Ragnarok...Here is the first few words of Shadows of Ragnarok, a book I am currently working on. <br /> Would the shadows of his future ever leave him or the misdeeds of his father ever be forgotten?pgacnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01868397677690901418noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-90060668837662473202014-10-24T22:48:08.826-05:002014-10-24T22:48:08.826-05:00Haha, I like this! I'd definitely read on.
A...Haha, I like this! I'd definitely read on.<br /><br /><br />Alexa S. Winters<br />thessalexa.blogspot.comAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-10322259404382118662014-10-24T22:47:28.302-05:002014-10-24T22:47:28.302-05:00Oooh intriguing!
Alexa S. Winters
thessalexa.blo...Oooh intriguing!<br /><br /><br />Alexa S. Winters<br />thessalexa.blogspot.comAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-52564327628053586442014-10-24T22:46:48.811-05:002014-10-24T22:46:48.811-05:00Great post! I'll definitely reread this when I...Great post! I'll definitely reread this when I go back to edit.<br />My first sentence is "I peer at the pictures in the locket, clutching the necklace in my fingers, as if memorizing my parents' faces can bring them back."<br /><br /><br />Alexa S. Winters<br />thessalexa.blogspot.comAlexa Mintahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13865586987033390255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47656189970991049762014-10-24T21:36:10.895-05:002014-10-24T21:36:10.895-05:00“No! Go steal your own food!” The boy said, dodgin...“No! Go steal your own food!” The boy said, dodging to the side and trying to get past Nitri, who stood blocking the alley's exit.<br />How was that?Annikahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05419480350241170274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-78127802629790662342014-10-24T16:00:46.171-05:002014-10-24T16:00:46.171-05:00Yep... I really really enjoy making up names.... I...Yep... I really really enjoy making up names.... I also have a guy called Roslen and one called Elon..... Farnear is a little like his name too. He is loving to hos wife, and close friends, but to most people including his adopted daughter the MC he is rather indifferent..... Though I have not worked not quite why yet. <br /><br />I like creating names that are pronounceable, simple but new, then no one will know someone with that name and have preconceived ideas about the character... and I don't either.Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09616906188229851218noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-1187092665112879512014-10-24T10:30:46.685-05:002014-10-24T10:30:46.685-05:00My first line in Broken Clouds:
"It will...My first line in Broken Clouds:<br /> <br />"It will be normal, and, heaven knows, you need a bit of normalcy." Esther Brooksmith (wisdomcreates)https://www.blogger.com/profile/15010043354045249021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-6527498044640766072014-10-24T08:44:32.808-05:002014-10-24T08:44:32.808-05:00First line of my book.First line of my book.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00712567729539976796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-23538444872524318752014-10-23T22:59:37.441-05:002014-10-23T22:59:37.441-05:00Ooh... mystery and suspense... Tell on!Ooh... mystery and suspense... Tell on!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12331254068588265995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-89466782836139464642014-10-23T22:56:18.977-05:002014-10-23T22:56:18.977-05:00Aww, thanks everyone! To answer Annie, this is act...Aww, thanks everyone! To answer Annie, this is actually a fantasy. It is set in a normal human village, but there is another race of Man--elves. Yes, I am that uncreative. I am thinking of changing "elves" to "wights" for originality's sake, but for now it's "elves." Humans are very racist towards elves.<br /><br />To answer Rachel, the person watching the sun set on the wheatfields is a weaver known as Aunt Mattie--and she finds today, hidden among the grain fronds, a little elf mother and son. Both are unconscious, and the mother is bleeding badly...<br /><br />And Hannah: "and you're a lot of times hard on yourself, I've found." Do you mean me in particular or "you" as in the general public? Just wondering. I'm glad you like my opening. It means a lot!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12331254068588265995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-56952797711308675252014-10-23T21:19:51.923-05:002014-10-23T21:19:51.923-05:00I like it! I love to feel like the character is ta...I like it! I love to feel like the character is talking to me.Alyssa M.https://www.blogger.com/profile/03973019274298192600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-24549100522417322082014-10-23T21:18:55.480-05:002014-10-23T21:18:55.480-05:00This sounds amazing!This sounds amazing!Alyssa M.https://www.blogger.com/profile/03973019274298192600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-2844912507769009152014-10-23T20:08:38.657-05:002014-10-23T20:08:38.657-05:00Haha! Thank you very much, ladies!Haha! Thank you very much, ladies!Rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12152756677069658806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-60272998911173416342014-10-23T16:00:16.389-05:002014-10-23T16:00:16.389-05:00Here's my working beginning sentences/paragrap...Here's my working beginning sentences/paragraph.<br /><br />In the quiet, still hallway I pull the hood of my cloak up over my head and pause, listening for noise. Slowly, carefully, I pull the great oak door open and breathe a sigh of relief when it doesn't creak. I slip out into the darkness of the night.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-13091147202966670962014-10-23T14:53:52.488-05:002014-10-23T14:53:52.488-05:00Cool, glad you all like it. :)Cool, glad you all like it. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11473180912669685785noreply@blogger.com