tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post6108059311795194632..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: How to SHOW your story instead of telling itStephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-40469920902064650772014-04-18T08:55:04.575-05:002014-04-18T08:55:04.575-05:00This was so much help to me and look forward to yo...This was so much help to me and look forward to your next post on this subject! Telling and not showing is really something I struggle with then writing. brittneydodshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08574511753727020850noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-65655097597472001232014-04-16T18:40:49.216-05:002014-04-16T18:40:49.216-05:00I haven't seen that much anime yet, but it'...I haven't seen that much anime yet, but it's cool. :D Recently my sister turned into an anime devouring monster. When she discovers an anime that is awesome, we usually end up watching it together. :)<br />Paying attention...That's something I meant to do, once upon a time. It seems I forgot. XP Well, I've got a pretty long to-read list so I guess I'll get started!Wynnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11708492265860114476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-19668649185197006922014-04-16T15:03:46.887-05:002014-04-16T15:03:46.887-05:00Thank you so much for this post! I've consiste...Thank you so much for this post! I've consistently struggled with showing vs. telling, but didn't understand exactly what "showing" meant. Distinguishing between action and emotion was enlightening!<br /><br />Also, I've wondered why there was such a drastic shift from telling to showing in literature. How did the Charles Dickens style go obsolete? Movies & TV--that explains it! The tricky thing for me is that I primarily read the classics to help me understand my historical setting. The problem is, when I read a bunch of Dostoevsky or Tolstoy, I not only pick up the cultural details but also their telling, description-heavy style. And you're right--I don't think readers would have patience with page-long descriptions of how secondary character look (shudder). <br /><br />I'm looking forward to next Monday's continuation along this theme!<br /><br />-The Russian PianistThe Russian Pianistnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-1905942820646310352014-04-16T13:15:37.880-05:002014-04-16T13:15:37.880-05:00Thanks, Cindy!Thanks, Cindy!Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-20410822502697283132014-04-16T13:15:09.163-05:002014-04-16T13:15:09.163-05:00I'll keep my eye out for some, Arlette!I'll keep my eye out for some, Arlette!Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-52578964606870232832014-04-16T13:14:42.418-05:002014-04-16T13:14:42.418-05:00Yes, this is definitely a second or third draft it...Yes, this is definitely a second or third draft item for me!Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-42001585706158876052014-04-15T10:45:25.708-05:002014-04-15T10:45:25.708-05:00This is a great article. I'm glad I'm not ...This is a great article. I'm glad I'm not the only one that notices that the older masters get away with tons of telling. I'm pretty good at showing emotion instead of telling it, but my problem is that I retreat nearly completely into my POV character's head for that. Connie Jeanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00929239591451167169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-48535465141063208432014-04-15T05:49:54.372-05:002014-04-15T05:49:54.372-05:00I think I face a real problem when I have to show ...I think I face a real problem when I have to show what my MC is feeling. If I'm showing what someone else is feeling through my MC's eyes, it's easy because I just write what my MC sees. But my MC can't see herself, she can only feel herself... argh I'm not able to put it properly. The thing is, I can't very well write 'My eyes glinted nastily', I can only write 'HIS/HER eyes glinted nastily and an ominous feeling came over me.' I can only write that sort of thing for OTHER characters.So with my MC I end up doing a lot of telling.Nokomihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02685980017044424161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-747132000546326582014-04-15T05:42:50.920-05:002014-04-15T05:42:50.920-05:00You watch anime? So do I that's awesome! And y...You watch anime? So do I that's awesome! And yeah showing is often awkward for me too :P I suppose we gotta pay attention when we're reading and catch what other authors do.Nokomihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02685980017044424161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-21544551681983390722014-04-15T00:46:27.389-05:002014-04-15T00:46:27.389-05:00I often imagine scenes as if they were part of an ...I often imagine scenes as if they were part of an anime. XD I can see it all clearly in my head, the way a character is showing emotions in stead of telling, but for some reason I can rarely find words to describe it. It comes out awkward and terrible, and I just give up and use some telling. As much as I don't want to use telling, it honestly seems to sound better than the awkward showing I come up with. I'm not sure quite what's wrong with me...Sometimes showing works, other times it just seems to die on the page.Wynnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11708492265860114476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-17082563927676980222014-04-14T22:22:51.677-05:002014-04-14T22:22:51.677-05:00Whoa. This was so, so, SO helpful!!! Thank you, St...Whoa. This was so, so, SO helpful!!! Thank you, Stephanie. This is just what I needed! I've been working madly on my WIP trying to show and not tell, but goodness it's hard. You broke it down so perfectly. THANK YOU!Christine Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15859881278385314279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-70655069278772493262014-04-14T21:33:15.843-05:002014-04-14T21:33:15.843-05:00This is a problem I definitely have. The first two...This is a problem I definitely have. The first two people who told me I didn't show enough and told too much got a blank stare. It's not that I didn't believe them, I just didn't know what they were talking about. I actually have a word document dedicated to random paragraphs where I try show an image, a scene, or a conversation telling as little as possible and showing as much.<br /><br />Characters saying things just so the reader knows? My personal pet peeve and yet, I'm sure I do it in my own books at times!<br /><br />Good post :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11316328217006467698noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-36590253718350509222014-04-14T16:29:54.189-05:002014-04-14T16:29:54.189-05:00This is extremely helpful, Stephanie! This is some...This is extremely helpful, Stephanie! This is something I struggle with a lot. Thanks for the post!Jillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17132663863438948786noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-3587008854228456022014-04-14T15:34:53.536-05:002014-04-14T15:34:53.536-05:00This is so helpful! I honestly didn't think I ...This is so helpful! I honestly didn't think I had too big of a problem with telling before I read this but I think I'm a sneaky teller in some areas. The Character A and B thing will definitely help. I'm going to be /much/ more away of how I write. Thank you so much! Cassia Schaar https://www.blogger.com/profile/04836274182415901787noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-77069126528048219722014-04-14T15:26:30.588-05:002014-04-14T15:26:30.588-05:00This is so helpful! I was confused about this. I&#...This is so helpful! I was confused about this. I'll have to look at my sentences like... He felt sweat beading on his forehead. :P Bethany Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160544671105522363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-42961707398367319772014-04-14T14:53:01.788-05:002014-04-14T14:53:01.788-05:00I always enjoy your posts and pin many of them on ...I always enjoy your posts and pin many of them on my Writer's toolbox board. But I had to comment on this one. Thanks for the camera tip, I'll be putting it to use.Cindy Joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18067136529045760848noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47844426388540438032014-04-14T11:19:11.391-05:002014-04-14T11:19:11.391-05:00gah. this is perfect. its just what i needed! t...gah. this is perfect. its just what i needed! thank you so, so much!<br /><br />~Abigail<br />sweetergetsthejourneyblog.blogspot.com- abigail - https://www.blogger.com/profile/17404538995705954419noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-5790710292571623892014-04-14T10:59:38.699-05:002014-04-14T10:59:38.699-05:00I'm reading Sense and Sensibility and Tom Sawy...I'm reading Sense and Sensibility and Tom Sawyer at the moment, and it drives me nuts how much telling there is. And your totally right, if I or someone else I read, wrote like that, I would not let it slip.<br /><br />I also have a BAD problem with telling too though. So this post was very helpful.<br />Thanks!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12346074592622433791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-21760336385136721682014-04-14T09:57:08.270-05:002014-04-14T09:57:08.270-05:00Thanks for this post, Mrs. Morrill! It was very h...Thanks for this post, Mrs. Morrill! It was very helpful!Alea Harpernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-10734689101510845772014-04-14T08:36:06.440-05:002014-04-14T08:36:06.440-05:00This is so incredibly helpful, Stephanie. Thanks!!...This is so incredibly helpful, Stephanie. Thanks!!writingsofrosiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04392844273425725934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-6746358068397642852014-04-14T07:47:51.103-05:002014-04-14T07:47:51.103-05:00Ah I loved this post Stephanie, thank you. Telling...Ah I loved this post Stephanie, thank you. Telling/Showing is really something I am struggling with a lot. Reading up on this is always a good thing for me, and will definitely look forward to the post of next week. Any chance you know of any good other articles/podcasts or anything on the subject?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15317792300616098592noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-55867338483437910682014-04-14T06:16:56.159-05:002014-04-14T06:16:56.159-05:00Thanks a lot for this post. I loved the character ...Thanks a lot for this post. I loved the character A/ character B thing you said. :) And the emotions part is definetely true. I can work on this in the second <br />or third draft, not the first one, right? Thanks again. <br /><br />http://teensliveforjesus.blogspot.ru<br /><br />Sofia Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03703884443937255154noreply@blogger.com