tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post6752525775153770870..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: Creating Tension: Raise the StakesStephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-6150765517294572712016-03-20T20:25:10.423-05:002016-03-20T20:25:10.423-05:00How do you always manage to give me greatly awesom...How do you always manage to give me greatly awesome new ideas for my WIP, Shannon? :D <br />Thanks a million!!!Savannah Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668452024211579085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-69335611422318488062016-03-20T17:17:05.087-05:002016-03-20T17:17:05.087-05:00I love group dynamics! I like to handle a lot of c...I love group dynamics! I like to handle a lot of characters, so I'm always interested in that kind of thing. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47283226086395687612016-03-20T17:14:26.291-05:002016-03-20T17:14:26.291-05:00Interesting group! I see a lot of potential there....Interesting group! I see a lot of potential there. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-62810118179555167122016-03-20T17:12:09.527-05:002016-03-20T17:12:09.527-05:00I see! I like the Underworld elements here. I see! I like the Underworld elements here. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-90946381737641678432016-03-20T17:10:33.805-05:002016-03-20T17:10:33.805-05:00There is a dwarf, a wizard, a telepath, and a mast...There is a dwarf, a wizard, a telepath, and a master swordsman. And later Avartes and his sister join with the group of bounty hunters when Avartes destroys the gem.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06820137664285521182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-48332214337689779722016-03-20T17:03:43.931-05:002016-03-20T17:03:43.931-05:00Sweet! They sound pretty cool. How large is the gr...Sweet! They sound pretty cool. How large is the group?James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-80944527052046631902016-03-20T03:48:52.375-05:002016-03-20T03:48:52.375-05:00The strange man is called Borifas and had in fact ...The strange man is called Borifas and had in fact saved Dorlin's life from Servus. Dorlin had tried to fend Servus off with his powers (he has the power to control fire but also has pyrophobia) but is unable to as Servus is a ghost and cannot be hurt. So Servus injures Dorlin severely and leaves him for dead, and later he is saved and given medical aid by Borifas. Borifas also witnesses Dorlin's powers, with Dorlin means to keep a secret, so he's forced to accept his help so he doesn't give away Dorlin's secret, even though he's convinced Borifas is a little crazy as he claims to be Dorlin's uncle.<br /><br />The Nair are shape-shifting demons from the Underworld, and Dorlin hates them severely. Servus used to be Dorlin's rival when he was training with the Emperor, till he betrayed the Empire and sold important secrets to the elves, the enemy of the Empire; the Emperor ordered Dorlin to kill Servus, which he did, only that in the Underworld Servus' spirit could strike a deal with Hel, the goddess of the Underworld, to escape back to the mortal world if he helps her to invade it. See, Hel feeds on souls, and recently the war between the Empire and the elves has stagnated, so she means to invade and steal live souls on her own :)starlightjason2https://www.blogger.com/profile/11371184169630869288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-66093580766896306662016-03-19T19:32:21.510-05:002016-03-19T19:32:21.510-05:00And also they first make the appearance right befo...And also they first make the appearance right before he learns his sister is alive.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06820137664285521182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-12258249291901586602016-03-19T19:09:11.805-05:002016-03-19T19:09:11.805-05:00They show up when the original thief of the gem pa...They show up when the original thief of the gem pays them to hunt down Avartes, and the bounty hunters show up at first trying to ambush Avartes as he sneaks into the other thief's hideout.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06820137664285521182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-65184195391713751262016-03-19T17:34:01.062-05:002016-03-19T17:34:01.062-05:00How/when do they show up in the book?How/when do they show up in the book?James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-60814191989355347132016-03-19T17:31:49.002-05:002016-03-19T17:31:49.002-05:00What crime are they framed for? What crime are they framed for? James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-37703739690121854482016-03-19T17:30:42.608-05:002016-03-19T17:30:42.608-05:00Suffering a necessity in fiction. Making the Quest...Suffering a necessity in fiction. Making the Quest actually end up benefiting the antagonist can work pretty well when it's done right!James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-78366032838993566352016-03-19T17:21:23.425-05:002016-03-19T17:21:23.425-05:00Exile is fun! But I do have some questions ...
How...Exile is fun! But I do have some questions ...<br />How did the strange man save his life? What is Servus's relation to the previous events and protagonist? And who/what are the Nair exactly? Just curious!<br /> My computer is wanting to update (meaning it's pretty slow and may glitch) so I'm sorry if anything is misspelled or anything of that sort since he's pretty notorious with that kind of thing during update related stuff. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-18336341161640333252016-03-18T19:37:52.525-05:002016-03-18T19:37:52.525-05:00The first time the stakes are raised in my story i...The first time the stakes are raised in my story is when the main character, Glorindon, discovers that his Wizard mentor is the (supposedly) last keeper of a great secret: the location of an ancient, powerful magical artifact. With this discovery comes the Quest to find the artifact and use it against the antagonist. But things go wrong on the Quest, and once found the artifact is lost again and heading straight for the dark lord. At the last Glorindon fails to retrieve the artifact...<br /><br />I need to flesh out my story a bit more, but that's the gist of it. I figure, what's the point of raising the stakes if you aren't going to make the character suffer the consequences when he fails?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06433886456986052001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-71763614857598485702016-03-18T16:13:03.301-05:002016-03-18T16:13:03.301-05:00I forgot to mention that a group of bounty hunters...I forgot to mention that a group of bounty hunters shows up anyway, and they all get infected, but they become his last allies for the rest of the series.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06820137664285521182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-26783446176728428572016-03-18T12:45:27.256-05:002016-03-18T12:45:27.256-05:00My story starts with the royal assassin, Dorlin, o...My story starts with the royal assassin, Dorlin, on a mission, and one so vital that messing up could mean the noose. But when his powers fly out of control during his escape he accidentally starts a forest fire, narrowly fleeing the flames and death. Since he successfully eliminated his target Dorlin is pardoned, his punishment shortened to an exile to the Vostol Forest. Embittered and angry, Dorlin accepts his punishment, seeking the help of a strange man who'd saved his life before to strike down his rival once and for all. But Servus has started summoning more and more Nair, and it seems like a full on invasion is at hand…<br /><br /><br />What do you think?starlightjason2https://www.blogger.com/profile/11371184169630869288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-16868290202563781122016-03-18T11:40:35.883-05:002016-03-18T11:40:35.883-05:00Thanks!Thanks!Linea Marshallnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-82296523178565013612016-03-18T11:14:46.976-05:002016-03-18T11:14:46.976-05:00Lol! That's quite a mess your character gets h...Lol! That's quite a mess your character gets himself into. The stakes should rise as the story continues and starting with strictly personal stakes which grow is great for your character and conflict. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-65204248319710489732016-03-18T11:13:08.881-05:002016-03-18T11:13:08.881-05:00Great job. Increasing stakes, a crew on the run. L...Great job. Increasing stakes, a crew on the run. Love it.Shannon Dittemorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07757781231485815876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-45573031573643317552016-03-18T11:12:30.294-05:002016-03-18T11:12:30.294-05:00Great job! I love that more and more characters ge...Great job! I love that more and more characters get involved as the story progresses. His sense of loss will be much higher if he fails. Bravo!Shannon Dittemorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07757781231485815876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-89649795939132235702016-03-18T09:05:30.190-05:002016-03-18T09:05:30.190-05:00Well, my book starts out as Tess being invited to ...Well, my book starts out as Tess being invited to join a new team of superheroes (she must learn to get along without her abilities or she'll be dropped from the team).<br /><br />Then they're sent on their first assignment (the whole team has to work together and succeed in the assignment or they'll most likely be dropped).<br /><br />During the relatively simple assignment, there's an accident. When they return to headquarters, they discover they've been framed. They have to go on the run and find out who framed them or else they'll be imprisoned for an awful crime they didn't commit.<br /><br />The stakes get higher from there, but revealing that would be too spoilery. :)Linea Marshallnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-61213826580721966792016-03-18T08:23:12.332-05:002016-03-18T08:23:12.332-05:00The stakes are fairly low in mine at first.
If Ava...The stakes are fairly low in mine at first.<br />If Avartes dosen't find the King's Hem and prove his innocence his bounty will be raised to the point that Bounty Hunters might take notice of him.<br />Then his last friend believes that Avartes actually did steal the gem, and Avartes must earn his trust back.<br />Then he learns his long dead sister actually isn't quite so dead, but she is out to kill him if he fails to find the gem.<br />Then people in the city begin to go crazy, acting out each of the seven deadly sins, and Avartes suspects the gem is doing it. And Avartes, while often uncaring of others, dosen't want to let that many people die.<br />Then Avartes learns the gem infected his sister, and the only way to cure it is destroy the gem, so he will have to choose between destroying it and returning it.<br />Next he destroys it, and while curing his sister, it released the Seven Sins from within.<br /><br />Then it goes to book two...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06820137664285521182noreply@blogger.com