tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post1675781248298766699..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: #WeWriteBooks, Post 13: How to Write a SceneStephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-19127964127234648942016-04-29T23:31:45.921-05:002016-04-29T23:31:45.921-05:00Did I link to something wrong?Did I link to something wrong?Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-42302787602870812972016-04-29T10:25:04.427-05:002016-04-29T10:25:04.427-05:00Here's the third(?) scene in my book:
Author&...Here's the third(?) scene in my book:<br /><br />Author's scene goal: Introduce Flint and his best friend Liam<br />The players: Flint and Liam, also an army captain<br />Location: The prince's tent<br />Time: About 2:30 in the afternoon<br />POV character: Flint's point of view<br />Character's goal: Decide on whether to accept giants' terms of surrender<br />Character's motivation: He wants to be done with this and get home<br />Scene Beginning: Flint and Liam playing chess<br />Scene Middle: Discussion of terms<br />Scene End: Decision to accept<br />Emotional tone: Playful<br />Conflict: Accept ridiculous terms or not<br />Major reveal, disaster, etc: They decide to accept. The prince is coming home!Rosie McCannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10756806467175885197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-68281320025621707652016-04-28T21:18:24.419-05:002016-04-28T21:18:24.419-05:00My chapters are usually so short that they are onl...My chapters are usually so short that they are only one scene.<br />Chapter One, scene one:<br />Author's goal: Introduce Rosamond and show her on her journey to Riverdell.<br />Players: Rosamond; Millicent, her handmaiden; her four guards; some fairies.<br />Location: An inn at the beginning, then the road to Kirnvale.<br />Time: Night, close to dawn.<br />POV: Rosamond, 3rd person.<br />Character's goal: Get to Kirnvale before the fairies find them.<br />Motivation: The fairies want to kill/capture Rosamond (though she doesn't really know why).<br />Beginning: An inn.<br />Middle: On a road in the countryside.<br />End: the forest near Kirnvale.<br />Emotional tone: Foreboding in the beginning, frantic in the middle.<br />Conflict: the fairies catch up to Rosamond and her companions.<br />Major disaster: Millicent, Arcel, Emery, Joras, and Frederic (the guards) are killed.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07652485434796760077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-6703144758128751272016-04-28T20:00:00.880-05:002016-04-28T20:00:00.880-05:00Author's scene goal: Provide more backstory an...Author's scene goal: Provide more backstory and a key piece of evidence.<br />Players: Russet Hunter and Arya Widow.<br />Location: Restraunt known as Garden of Eden.<br />Time: 8pm-9pm<br />POV: Russet Hunter.<br />POV characters goal: Make it through this date he has been forced to go on without being seduced by Arya.<br />POV motivation: To gather evidence to prove his sister's innocence.<br />Scene beginning: Russet is sitting at a table waiting for Arya.<br />Scene middle: Arya asks Russet if he has ever loved anyone.<br />Scene end: Russet informs Arya that he knows what love feels like and what she is offering him is not it and then turns his back on her.<br />Emotional tone: Tense.<br />Coflict: Russet vs. Arya.<br />Major reveal disaster: Russet admits that he was once in love.<br />pgacnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01868397677690901418noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-12699150445587850482016-04-28T16:55:37.995-05:002016-04-28T16:55:37.995-05:00Thank you so much! I'm so glad you like it. :)...Thank you so much! I'm so glad you like it. :)Anna Haberhttps://thestoryscientistblog.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-20855944054837323672016-04-28T07:00:41.032-05:002016-04-28T07:00:41.032-05:00Did you intend to post chapter six and not chapter...Did you intend to post chapter six and not chapter twelve?Tiffanienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-67916615627471449722016-04-27T21:41:47.968-05:002016-04-27T21:41:47.968-05:00Thanks :-) There is a reward for her because there...Thanks :-) There is a reward for her because there was a defense shooting that involved the son of a vigilante leader, who now seeks revenge.Abinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-77473541923716944122016-04-27T18:38:56.082-05:002016-04-27T18:38:56.082-05:00I'm so glad it's helpful. And thanks for r...I'm so glad it's helpful. And thanks for reading King's Folly. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-27487151491037491812016-04-27T18:37:27.642-05:002016-04-27T18:37:27.642-05:00Ooh, I like this, Anna. I like how you show his ch...Ooh, I like this, Anna. I like how you show his character in how he leaves furs to pay for the supplies he takes. And that you start with a nightmare, but by the end his nightmare is coming to life... that is cool. Good luck with your edits!Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-83431753332759834822016-04-27T18:33:59.951-05:002016-04-27T18:33:59.951-05:00Nice, Jason. I love that you're doing a lot of...Nice, Jason. I love that you're doing a lot of things in your opening scene and that you're starting with action. Good stuff. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-87040705591653755412016-04-27T18:30:21.906-05:002016-04-27T18:30:21.906-05:00Fun, Abi. I love Old West stories. Seems like a re...Fun, Abi. I love Old West stories. Seems like a really intense action scene too. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-61156455985863589712016-04-27T18:28:42.124-05:002016-04-27T18:28:42.124-05:00Sounds great, Esther. Good job. Such a crowd is a ...Sounds great, Esther. Good job. Such a crowd is a great place for tension, too. Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-34555857431586111492016-04-27T18:26:55.755-05:002016-04-27T18:26:55.755-05:00Fun, Linea! Good job. :-)Fun, Linea! Good job. :-)Jill Williamsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943570354349667196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-28849585146307662732016-04-27T17:27:45.383-05:002016-04-27T17:27:45.383-05:00Thanks! :) I've never had a successful edit (I...Thanks! :) I've never had a successful edit (I've mostly done first drafts), so I'm kind of winging it. But since I'm back, here's my scene exercise thing for the beginning scene of my book.<br /><br />Author's scene goal: To introduce Crow, the main character, and get the main conflict going<br />The players: Crow and the men chasing him<br />Location: The Salaki Kevenar forest and a little fishing village<br />Time: Early morning, New Year/first day of spring<br />POV character: Crow<br />Character's goal: Steal supplies from the villagers (he lives alone in the forest); leave the furs he's accumulated over the winter as "payment"<br />Character's motivation: This is something he does every spring to help him survive.<br />Scene beginning: Crow awakens from a nightmare about a past traumatic experience.<br />Scene middle: Crow goes into town for supplies (before anyone else is up).<br />Scene end: Crow is interrupted in his supply-hunting by men chasing him; specifically, he hears the voice that haunts his nightmares, and flees in fear.<br />Emotional tone: Goes from wary to fearful<br />Conflict: The nightmare, then the man from Crow's nightmare chasing him.<br />Major reveal, disaster, etc.: They're after him! The nightmare goes on. . . . (cue dramatic music)<br /><br />Anna Haberhttps://thestoryscientistblog.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-49362998302987293892016-04-27T17:00:37.860-05:002016-04-27T17:00:37.860-05:00OOOOOHHHHH!!! Sorry, I have a Nordic culture in my...OOOOOHHHHH!!! Sorry, I have a Nordic culture in my WIP, so I get rather over-excited when I see mention of such:) Very intriguing! Reid Xhinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-7770658543302752092016-04-27T16:56:24.596-05:002016-04-27T16:56:24.596-05:00Oooh ... This is rather intriguing! Why is there a...Oooh ... This is rather intriguing! Why is there a reward out for her?James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-32267291892867560622016-04-27T16:54:20.069-05:002016-04-27T16:54:20.069-05:00Edits are difficult, but it'll be worth it:) I...Edits are difficult, but it'll be worth it:) I hope the best for you! James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-73106097946546614702016-04-27T16:51:47.110-05:002016-04-27T16:51:47.110-05:00It's cool that you decided to share your openi...It's cool that you decided to share your opening scene. The action here sounds pretty good, and I'm intrigued by how the Nair is somehow healing itself (it implies the Nair doesn't normally do so, which implies future relevance). It seems like a good way to introduce your character's skill. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-42888083278133162262016-04-27T16:47:40.132-05:002016-04-27T16:47:40.132-05:00Haha! I really like your character motivation here...Haha! I really like your character motivation here. Good food is life:) The scene seems like a great opportunity for characterization. James Olivernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-91161455618083373122016-04-27T15:15:45.466-05:002016-04-27T15:15:45.466-05:00Author's scene goal: To set up the conflict.
T...Author's scene goal: To set up the conflict.<br />The players: Halvard, Gustav, Queen Gunilla, the audience at the Thing.<br />Location: The arena in the village.<br />Time: 6:00pm, late winter<br />POV character: Halvard<br />POV character's goal: To attend the Thing and find out what's going on. <br />POV character's motivation: To find out about his father.<br />Scene Beginning: Halvard is sitting on one of the outskirt benches. <br />Scene Middle: The announcement that the latest quest to fetch help has failed. <br />Scene End: Halvard decides that he has to volunteer.<br />Emotional tone: Tense, fearful<br />Conflict: Not so much conflict with anyone in the scene itself, but there's references to the overall conflict and the characters are all feeling the strain. <br />Major reveal, disaster, etc: That there will be only one more quest to fetch the Dragon Guides and that if whoever goes fails, then the rest of the Skadi will attack anyway, likely getting themselves killed. Estherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03549396300256953500noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-47076378911461942502016-04-27T14:47:41.446-05:002016-04-27T14:47:41.446-05:00Thanks for this post Jill, I've always had a h... Thanks for this post Jill, I've always had a hard time structuring scenes.<br /><br /> (At this point in the story the villain hasn't found my main characters yet, but has offered a reward for their capture/demise) <br />Author's scene goal: To make the characters realize that they re going to have to fight back, and to show how they react to high stress situations.<br />The players: Apryl(Protagonist), Chris(her brother), James(her dad), Rachel(her mom), and three or four men seeking to fill a bounty<br />Location: outskirts of San Antonio, TX<br />Time: 7:00 am, early spring, 1870s<br />POV character: Apryl<br />Character's goal: Survive; make sure her family survives<br />Character's motivation: Survival; love<br />Scene Beginning: Apryl and her family try to leave town quietly, but they run into several bounty hunters. <br />Scene Middle: Gunfire is exchanged, Apryl is shot in the arm.<br />Scene End: The battle is won, but Apryl is in immense pain and needs to see a doctor (but they also need to get out of town)<br />Emotional tone: high stress<br />Conflict: Apryl and her family vs the bounty hunters<br />Major reveal, disaster, etc: The main characters are forced to stop running and figure out a way to confront the problemAbinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-60094489468785268592016-04-27T14:25:33.318-05:002016-04-27T14:25:33.318-05:00Thanks for the info! At the moment, I'm writin...Thanks for the info! At the moment, I'm writing a historical romance. This is more helpful than you can imagine. Thanks so much!! I love "A King's Folly" by the way!A Deturmined Writernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-82507915054833630232016-04-27T14:22:28.168-05:002016-04-27T14:22:28.168-05:00I should really get back to my homework, so I won&...I should really get back to my homework, so I won't do the exercise right now, but I will do it later for every single scene in the 50,000-word WIP I'm editing. Thanks so much for posting this today! I've been floundering through my edits up to now, and I think this will help a lot. :)<br /><br />AnnaAnna Haberhttps://thestoryscientistblog.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-77726725967131678022016-04-27T09:22:26.626-05:002016-04-27T09:22:26.626-05:00Cool! Here's the breakdown of my very first sc...Cool! Here's the breakdown of my very first scene in my book.<br /><br />Author's scene goal: To introduce Dorlin Hull as the royal assassin of Imperia, to show his powers and his fear of them, and to start the conflict with the Nair, all in a fast paced action scene.<br /><br />The players: Dorlin, the undead shape-shifting creatures called the Nair, and the asleep elf he's supposed to assassinate.<br /><br />Location: The Vostol Forest.<br /><br />Time: Late night.<br /><br />POV character: Dorlin.<br /><br />Character's goal: To defeat the Nair and to assassinate his target.<br /><br />Character's motivation: To save his own skin and to try to complete his mission as the Emperor is often harsh on failures.<br /><br />Scene Beginning: Dorlin finds out the Nair is after him.<br /><br />Scene Middle: Dorlin fights the Nair, but it's somehow healing itself and has a major advantage.<br /><br />Scene End: Dorlin hides in a tree, and blows up the gunpowder storage to take the Nair down.<br /><br />Emotional tone: Slightly dark.<br /><br />Conflict: With the Nair.<br /><br />Major reveal, disaster, etc: To defeat the Nair Dorlin shots a flaming arrow at the local storage of gunpowder, starting a forest fire and killing both the Nair and his target. This creates some conflict within him due to his fear of fire and the fact that his parents died in an arson.starlightjason2https://www.blogger.com/profile/11371184169630869288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-70622013349256660822016-04-27T06:45:40.251-05:002016-04-27T06:45:40.251-05:00I love your scene breakdown, Mrs. Williamson! I...I love your scene breakdown, Mrs. Williamson! I'll give it a go with a scene I'm currently writing.<br /><br /> Author's scene goal: To get to know Wyatt (a side character) better and show that he doesn't know much about the outdoors.<br /><br /> The players: Tess and Wyatt<br /><br /> Location: In a Jeep heading into town for groceries<br /><br /> Time: about 6 a.m.<br /><br /> POV character: Tess (first person)<br /><br /> Character's goal: To survive the drive into town while Wyatt freaks out about eyes on the side of the road, which are deer.<br /><br /> Character's motivation: She wants her eggs and sausage.<br /> <br /> Scene Beginning: Tess and Wyatt get in the Jeep and head out into the early morning.<br /><br /> Scene Middle: In the middle of conversation, Wyatt shrieks about eyes. It's a deer grazing by the road.<br /><br /> Scene End: Tess and Wyatt arrive at the store, albeit a little frazzled.<br /><br /> Emotional tone: Lighthearted & humorous<br /><br /> Conflict: Tess is an outdoorsy girl and doesn't get why Wyatt, a more bookish guy, is freaked out by driving on a small country road while it's dark out.<br /><br /> Major reveal, disaster, etc: Nothing major.Linea Marshallnoreply@blogger.com