tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post2853701102049579226..comments2024-01-12T00:48:48.031-06:00Comments on Go Teen Writers: Q&A: My Story is Happening Too Fast!Stephanie Morrillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-90692664859974403472012-03-17T09:16:31.202-05:002012-03-17T09:16:31.202-05:00Not sure why my computer isn't letting me resp...Not sure why my computer isn't letting me respond directly to your comment, JT. In short, yes, I think it's fine in a battle scene to keep the action moving.<br /><br />I've never written a battle scene before, but what I've noticed as a reader of battle scenes is that it's very effective if after a key character is killed, there's a scene or chapter break. I don't know why that works well, but I think it does. Provides some sort of validation of, "Yes, this is a big event. You can pause to be upset."<br /><br />Does that make sense?<br /><br />And, Rachelle, italics noted :)Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-14084184760190108862012-03-16T20:37:00.656-05:002012-03-16T20:37:00.656-05:00Stephanie, *thank you for this*
I wish I could it...Stephanie, *thank you for this*<br /><br />I wish I could italicize that. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06150136011032761640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-46698644475441502982012-03-16T20:27:46.417-05:002012-03-16T20:27:46.417-05:00(Ding) on that last paragraph. My story revolves a...(Ding) on that last paragraph. My story revolves around guys who are losing everything... and guess what none of them are reacting. partly due to current (poor) structure, they're all running around doing the next thing while any reaction to their losses has completely disappeared. Question is, are they allowed to skip denial in the heat of battle, and can they replace 'bring him back' with 'I'm not ready' They're all mercurial too.JThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15791148729590612474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-83623243852891297832012-03-16T13:54:30.680-05:002012-03-16T13:54:30.680-05:00That's one of the things I have trouble with i...That's one of the things I have trouble with in my story as well.Brian Alexanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00069539442682466132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-34964651642396771882012-03-16T13:41:22.288-05:002012-03-16T13:41:22.288-05:00They do! They just opened it in January. It's ...They do! They just opened it in January. It's fun for me, but a combination of fun/stressful for them. It's a really cool spot and the coffee's excellent. The only bad thing is it's 20 minutes from where I live (not super convenient) and when I've tried going there to work, I run into too many people I know...Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-53644967882163531482012-03-16T13:39:37.232-05:002012-03-16T13:39:37.232-05:00Hi, Allison! Thanks :)Hi, Allison! Thanks :)Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-88048480132921860432012-03-16T11:50:26.365-05:002012-03-16T11:50:26.365-05:00I can't wait to look at these link! In my WIP ...I can't wait to look at these link! In my WIP I've been a little afraid that thingsnwill unfold to quickly so i try to hold them off but then I get stuck. <br /><br />Your parents own a coffee shop?!!!! Is it super fun to be around? Ive always wondered what that'd be like!Tonyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14500897912581589616noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-42351358417721388522012-03-16T10:21:22.110-05:002012-03-16T10:21:22.110-05:00Here's another Allison who found it helpful. :...Here's another Allison who found it helpful. :)Allisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07838145980198951452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-39324747918257183212012-03-16T09:16:02.390-05:002012-03-16T09:16:02.390-05:00Glad you found it helpful, Allison!Glad you found it helpful, Allison!Stephanie Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128389560727867719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4024721400572472213.post-18092377423398549902012-03-16T08:03:30.977-05:002012-03-16T08:03:30.977-05:00Thanks for the Angela Hunt post, that should help!...Thanks for the Angela Hunt post, that should help! And the five stages of grief, I always forget that. Right now in my WIP my character jumps from denial to acceptance. Oops.<br />Showing vs. telling is a hard one for me. I mean, I could say "Lily's hands curled into fists and she froze." but saying "Lily was angry." is soooo much easier!<br /><br />Thanks again!Allisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05433338978586263492noreply@blogger.com