The right nouns and verbs will make your story sing. Just for fun, hunt through your manuscript and find a strong and specific noun you used and share it with us!
Just for fun (and maybe because I'm procrastinating a tiny bit) I found this one in my day's edits: "He leans to hand me a fresh handkerchief from his pocket and then settles into his wingback chair to smoke." I like the specification of the wingback chair versus my original "large chair."
Ooh, I can totally picture that. Here, from my crazy camp project with Julliard, aliens, unlikeable characters, but a few good lines: "I model several permutations of blouses and capris in front of the mirror before settling on a floral sundress." I must save that for a future first-person project with a more sympathetic narrator and an, um, plot.
I'm bad with nouns.... Meh. I'm much better with verbs, LOL.
But anyway, here's something that I found: My fingers wrapped around the top of the wall, rough brick scraping away a layer of skin and cracking my fingernails. I'm not sure the individual nouns are too fantastic, but I like how the sentence goes. ;)
I'm not sure if this is what you meant, but if it is, here it is:
ReplyDeleteIf felt like all my wounds had been healed, my worries denied, and all my wrongs righted.
The reason I thought this might be what you meant is because I used that rather than adj. like wonderful, scary, and things like that.
Oh, I like that sentence so much, Emily! Nice work!
Delete:D Thanks!
DeleteJust for fun (and maybe because I'm procrastinating a tiny bit) I found this one in my day's edits: "He leans to hand me a fresh handkerchief from his pocket and then settles into his wingback chair to smoke." I like the specification of the wingback chair versus my original "large chair."
ReplyDeleteOh, I like that! I have to go google wingback chairs now, so I can get a good picture of what they are. ;)
DeleteOoh, I can totally picture that.
ReplyDeleteHere, from my crazy camp project with Julliard, aliens, unlikeable characters, but a few good lines: "I model several permutations of blouses and capris in front of the mirror before settling on a floral sundress." I must save that for a future first-person project with a more sympathetic narrator and an, um, plot.
Cool! I can picture that. :D (She's wearing a large-brimmed sunhat too, in my picture. ;) )
DeleteNice!
DeleteAnd, yes, plots are good :)
I'm bad with nouns.... Meh. I'm much better with verbs, LOL.
ReplyDeleteBut anyway, here's something that I found:
My fingers wrapped around the top of the wall, rough brick scraping away a layer of skin and cracking my fingernails.
I'm not sure the individual nouns are too fantastic, but I like how the sentence goes. ;)
What's funny is that when I was going through my edits to share one of my own, I almost shared a verb. It's easier to be snazzy with those, I guess.
DeleteYou picked great details. I like this a lot :)
Haha, apparently. :D
DeleteThank you! :)